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   작성자   isjjang7    등록일   2018-10-12
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yesterday, mom and me bought vanilla ice cream. It is look like Korean Ice cream ' together'. What a amazing! I like vanila ice cream very much, so today morning, I ate ice cream little. And finish my school, I ate ice cream again. Then, I ate ice cream afternoon. So, I ate vanilla ice cream three time. When, my mom is come, she scolded me. Because I ate ice cream all. And I was very sad todayㅠㅠ Please tomorrow is better today!:(

 

CORRECTIONS:

Yesterday, my mom andbought vanilla ice cream.

It looks like a Korean ice cream all together.

Amazing!

I like vanilla ice cream very much.

So today morning, I ate ice cream a little.

After my class, I ate ice cream again.

Then, I ate ice cream in the afternoon.

So, I ate vanilla ice cream three times.

When my mom came, she scolded me.

Because I always eat ice cream.

I was very sad today.

I hope tomorrow is a better day.

 

COMMENTS:

Good job, Jang in seo! Keep on writing compositions. By the way, I like vanilla ice cream too. ^^

/Leny/

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