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   작성자   pjh0223    등록일   2018-03-04
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March 4th saturday Advancher playground Iwent to the kim hae Advancher. I ride a slide and eat the soft candy. It,s very very excited. I make to allow and shot to the allow. Next time I go to the play ground.





March 4th, Saturday

I went to adventure playground with Kim Hae. I rode a slide and ate the cotton candy. It's very exciting. I even shoot an arrow. Next time, I will come again and play.



Grade: 90%

Jin Han kindly check your spelling and choice of words! Job well done!

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